英文添削

2018年1月31日

大阪大学 和文英訳 自由英作文

高3 添削と書き換え

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2017/10/15

英検準1級 高2の英文エッセー添削

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2017/8/12

一橋大学 高3の英文エッセーの添削

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2017/07/26

CCF_000044   京大和文英訳 練習問題

CCF_000043  高3解答と添削

ナチュラル英文例
1) One day, when I looked out of the window, in spite of having nothing to see, I saw two waitresses who came from inside the restaurant sit down in front of the opposite building of me. They seemed to have a chance to take a rest. Looking at their right hands, I thought I was in modern Paris. That was because one had a cigarette, and the other was holding a smartphone, respectively in their hands. If this city had been what it was twenty years ago, I could have found these two women (H)holding cigarettes in their hands.

2) Now potatoes are indispensable and familiar vegetables for cooking. They were brought back to Europe after the arrival of Columbus in the Americas. It took them more than two hundred years to become popular in various places. Although they are highly nutritious, and can root in a stable way and be harvested from the soil, however barren it is, people disliked their strange appearance and didn’t accept them easily.

(追加)参考
There are popular diets around the world that contain potatoes. Cooking curries is not so complex, and mothers can come up with them. In fact, food companies supply us with various ingredients for cooking curries, like curry roux.

2017.02.05

高1解答と添削)

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ナチュラル英文に直す 解答例)

問題) I was asked to say something that I’m feeling proud of in my life. This unexpected question was embarrassing at first. I couldn’t come up with any ideas, as my intense efforts to realize any goals have not yet been rewarded. I have been struggling to find my good aspects, and have finally reached the below opinion.  

  I am proud of my family members, from the viewpoint that we have never been late to our given places, such as schools and workplaces.  

   We make it a rule to get up by 7:00 every day including weekends.   Early risers are surely able to find enough time to prepare for necessary daily things.   

 Studying in the morning before going to school is sometimes possible, when it comes to me.   In spite of only 10 minutes’ study, my sustainable efforts for a year will surely lead to unexpected amazing points.

 There seem to be other benefits of this good habit.  Strong and powerful concentration in classes is possible, for example, because we don’t feel sleepy.

 Also, it is healthy. Most people have an intention to make the habit their own, but it seems difficult to realize.

 Thus, I can be proud of my family members’ strong intention of keeping this rule.

2017. 01.24

高3大学受験エッセイの添削

受講生解答と添削)

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ナチュラルな英文に直す 解答例)

 I agree with the idea that the number of Japanese people who work in foreign countries will increase in the future.

 I have two reasons for believing this, as (because) I will discuss below.

 First, it seems to me that young Japanese people working abroad are felt to be cool and regarded as a class of people with high abilities. Nowadays, the Japanese government has a strategy for educating good, young English speakers, so more people will have a desire to work abroad in the future.

 Second, people who have work experiences in foreign countries are likely to have a chance to be hired and treated as valuable employees by Japanese companies.

 In addition, as these employees likely have experiences dealing with and resolving conflicts within foreign workplaces, they can overcome difficulties here in Japan, (when facing foreign affairs that other Japanese workers cannot easily find a way to resolve. Of course, not all these people excellent or competent, but the possibility that they are smart and able in these areas is stronger. )

 In conclusion, as people who have attained international career experiences can probably hold high positions within Japanese companies, the number of these people will increase in the future.

2016/12/07

英検2級英文エッセイの練習

高1Aの解答)

1)     I have a dog in my house.

2)     But I like cat better than dog.

3)     I have two reasons.

4)     First, cat is a little unfriendly.

5)     I think the attraction of cats is their personality that being capricious.

6)     Cats don’t to be earn when they don’t feel like it.

7)     Thus, I will to be pleased when a cat sneak.

8)     Second, their fur is softer than a dog.

9)     I like to touch soft things very much.

10)  Thus, I like to touch cats.

11)  I think tails of cats is cute, too.

12)  For these reasons, I like cat.

13)  But I like dog, too.

14)  I think there are attractions both of them. 

 

Correction)

1) There is a dog in my family.

2) However, I like cats better than dogs.

3) I have two reasons for preferring this.

4) First, cats are a little bit unfriendly.

5) I think that the capricious character of cats is attractive.

6) They don’t pay attention to anything except when they feel like having certain things.

7) Thus, I am always pleased when they sneak towards me.

8) Second, their fur is softer than that dog’s fur.

9) Touch soft things is very comfortable.

10) Thus, I like to touch cats.

11) Cats’ tails are also cute to touch.

12) For these reasons, I like cats better.

13) Honestly speaking, though, I like dogs, too.

14) In conclusion, both kinds of animals are fantastic and attractive. 

評価)文法ミスはあるとはいえ、スムーズに英文を書いています。

小学生時からオーラルでの英語に触れておりナチュラルな英文を書いています。

高2女子の解答)

1)     I don’t like both cats and dogs so much, as I didn’t have time to be close them.

2)     However, I like dogs better than cats.

3)     I have one reason for this.

4)     It’s why my family and I often suffer from faces by homeless cats.

5)     My house stands in front of a housing complex, where a lot of homeless cats live.

6)     They often defecate our parking area for bicycles and our garden, and we feel bad when we step on their faces.

7)     I don’t have a sad memory about dogs.

8)     Therefore, I like dogs better than cats. 

添削後の英文)

1)     I’m interested in neither cats nor dogs, as I haven’t had chance to play with either.

2)     However, generally speaking, I like dogs better than cats.

3)     I have one main reason for feeling this way.

4)     My house stands right in front of a housing complex, where many homeless cats walk around.

5)     My family members have become worried about feces.

6)     They often defecate in our parking area and our garden, and on our bicycles. We are fed up with this, because we often step on their feces.  

7)     On the other hand, when it comes to dogs, I haven’t had any bad experiences.

8)     Thus, my favorite animals are dogs rather than cats.

添削後の英文)

言いたいことが十分英文では表現しきれなかった様子です。この高2は高1からの参加ですが、中高とも受験英語を強調する環境、つまり和訳と文法を集中的に指導する環境にあり、発想が日本語的な感がありましたが、現在変化の途上にあります。

 

 

2016/11/16

大学入試問題の解答 高3

1童話 シンデレラのサマリーを書く 

高3の解答)

(1)   I’d like to choose “Cinderella”

(2)   Cinderella’s father remarried a woman who had two dauters, and she lived with them.

(3)   They make her work as if she was a maid.

(4)   One day, they are invited to a party which is to find a partner of the prince.

(5)   She wants to go, but they reject that.

(6)   However, after they go to the party, a wich comes to her and enables her to go to the party.

(7)   And then, the woch tells her to come back by 12 o’clock because her magic continues only until 12 o’clock.

(8)   At the party, the prince falls in love with her.

(9)   However, she leaves there at 12 o’clock, leaving a glass shoe she is wearing.

(10) The prince seeks her and have all girls in the country wear the shoe because he thinks who can wear it is Cinderella.

(11) Then, she wear it and they get married.

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添削後)

(1)   Cinderella, the main character of a fairy tale, is a symbolic character that can attract girls. For a few people who don’t know this amazing story, I’ll summarize it for you.   

(2)   Cinderella’s father remarried and they lived with his new wife and her two daughters.

(3)   Their new family members felt no tenderness toward her, though. Eventually, instead of enjoying happiness, Cinderella couldn’t avoid obeying their strict rules for doing many things around the house, as if she were their slave.

(4)   One day, an invitation arrived for Cinderella, her stepsisters and stepmother to attend a ball. The purse of this ball was to find a bride suitable for a prince of the kingdom.

(5)   Cinderella, of course, had a strong desire to attend the ball, but her new family would not allow her dream to come true.

(6)   After they dashed their dreams and left her alone, a witch appeared, saying that she could attend the ball

(7)   ,under the condition that she return home no later than midnight, and that if she broke her promise, the witch’s power would not be effective to help her.

(8)   Among so many guests attending the splendid reception, the prince discovered a beautiful woman, Cinderella, who strongly attracted him, and he immediately fell in love with her. He tried to express his affection by asking her to marry him.

(9)   Suddenly, at that moment, she noticed that the time limit to escape from the place was approaching. It was almost midnight, so she began to rush back home, accidentally leaving one of her glass shoes at the ball.

(10) After that, as the prince wouldn’t give up on finding her, and looked all over the country for her. He had Cinderella’s shoe, and made every girl he encountered try on that glass shoe in order to identity the woman of his dreams.

 (11) After struggling to find her, he finally succeeded in finding her, and they got marring.

2上記童話についてオピニオンを書く。

高3の解答

(1)   If I had a girl, I’d like to tell this tale because this story tell us that however hard our situation seems to be, if we stay honesty, someday wonderful events will happen to us and we will be saved.

(2)   On the other hand, if my child were a boy, I wouldn’t do because I think a boy is not interested in such a story.

(3)   A boy is likely to love an exciting story such as an exploring story, but Cinderella is romantic rather than exciting.

添削後)

(1) If I were the mother of a little girl, I’d like to tell her this tale, because this story can teach us that whatever hardship we suffer from, as long as we stay honest, we’ll someday enjoy everything we wish for, and I believe this is true..

(2) On the other hand, if I had a boy, I would avoid telling him the story, because I don’t feel he’d be interested in it.

(3) In other words, boys tend to be interested in exciting stories, such as adventure stories, and not romantic fairly stories like Cinderella.

評価)こうした入試問題を短時間で、かつ100字~150字程度で、書かなければならない受験生は本当に大変です。

物語のサマリーはシンプルに書くとつまらなく魅力のないものとなり、読んでいてつまらない。

なので、少し工夫をし楽しいものにしようとすると字数も時間も相当かかる。

入試英作文としては決してうまい添削と訂正が行えませんでした。

文法ミスは少なく、どう論理的にうまく表現するかを示そうとすると長くなるからです。

2020年から入試が大きく変わる予定です。英文エッセイー出題方法も変わるべきだと思います。

 

 

 

 

2016/11/08

英検2級 100字エッセイの練習 

高2による解答

1)     I think that people need not to stop making movies which include many violent scenes.

2)     First, there are so many people who like such scenes.

3)     Thus, people is worth making such movies for them.

4)     Second, the scenes make us excited, and it also feel us realistic.

5)     Reality is important to empathize with its interest.

6)     For these reason, I don’t think people should stop making movies which have a lot of violent scenes.

添削後の英文

1)     I don’t think that people need to reconsider the effect movies with violent scenes have on people..

2)     This is the way I feel. First, there are many people who like to watch these crucial   scenes.

3)     Thus, filmmakers and people involved in creating movies tend to think of these movies, and the violent scenes, as beneficial. Also, it’s a good opportunity for them to increase their profits.

4)     Second, violent scenes make us feel pain and excitement, which can help us realize how terrible violence is.  

5)     When watching violent movies, we can feel pleasure, and more importantly, at the same time, we can have a chance to realize that violence is behavior we should be avoiding..  

6)     For these reasons, I don’t think that the people that make movies should completely avoid making violent films.

評価)

添削後の英文は、字数を超えることが多いのですが、試験のための英語後という側面より、英語で自己を表現することに重きを置くため、避けられません。

彼ら自身が、繰り返しや、クリアではない日本語発想の英文、そして論理的につながらないことは、だめだなのだと気づくことが大切だと思います。

 

2016/10/30

大学入試 150字前後のエッセイ

高3による解答

1)     I don’t think world peace is achievable.

2)     In fact, since human beings appeared in the world, we have never experienced world peace.

3)     I know a lot of wars which broke out in the past and hear various painful news which report disputes, terrorism, and so on.

4)     Japan is generally regarded as a peaceful country, but I think even Japan cannot achieve peace.

5)     Indeed, Japan gets closer to peace these days/ compared with Sengoku Period, when many generals in Japan fighted for territory, wealth, and power, /or the first half of the twenty century, when Japan fight with other countries positively.

6)     However, there are still numerous cases of murder or bodily injury now.

7)     Besides, no violence doesn’t mean peace because human can get hurted not only by violence but also by words.

8)     In Japan, a lot of bullies occur at school and bullies are done by words or behavior as well as violence.

9)      Adults also bully people by words in japan.

10)   They often hurt someone who made a mistake by criticizing too much through Internet.

11)  It is true that there is not any violence. However, we shouldn’t say Japan is a peaceful country.

12)  Even Japan is far from peace, so I’m afraid that we can never achieve world peace.

13)  However, we should make efforts to get closer to it.

 添削後の英文

1)     I don’t think world peace is still achievable.

2)     Put differently, since human beings appeared on the earth, they seemingly have yet to experience complete world peace.

3)     I know that there were a lot of wars in the past through my school classes, and even now hear too much news about painful disputes, terrorism, and so on, on the media and internet.

4)     When it comes to Japan, it tends to be generally regarded as one of the most peaceful countries, but that’s not the case.

5)     Of course, compared to the past periods of wars that ancient, or old, Japan experienced, such as the Sengoku Period, when many Japanese generals fought one another for their territories and wealth, and their intentions to have stronger powers, or the first half of the twentieth century, when Japan aggressively advanced to other countries’ territories, the current situation appears to be relatively peaceful. 

6)     We can still witness, though, numerous cases of murders and bodily injuries of people, and massacre everywhere on the media and internet. With those terrible cruel activities, a peaceful world would never be realized!

7)     Besides, not only actual bodily harm but also slanders are hindrances to world peace.

8)     We can see and hear a lot of bullies at schools, for example, who are doing bad things to their classmates with verbal attacks as well as violent assaults.  

9)     Those bad experiences may lead bullies to being adults, who can come up with approaches without consideration, in which they try to resolve difficult problems they face with violence.

10)  Military exercises may be unavoidable to maintain peace in the current world. World peace won’t be realized without mutual understanding, and most importantly, without human beings’ wisdom gained through continuous learning and efforts.

評価) 

字数を増やすために、無理に異なるトピックを書き加えてしまい、まとまりが悪くなりました。

100字ならまとめることができるが、150字では情報の繰り返しが多く苦労したようです

具体的には、以下の 913 は 1~8 の中で語られている内容の繰り返しの印象です。

9) Adults also tend to bully others in the same ways.

10) They often hurt those who are mistakes by strictly criticizing on the Internet.

11) In fact, there are no violent assaults. However, we shouldn’t say Japan is a peaceful country.

12) Even Japan is far from peace, so I’m afraid that we can never achieve complete world peace.

13) However, we should make efforts to get closer to complete world peace.

よって、ロジックを整えるため省き、上記10のような結論の中で、大人社会について触れる程度でよいでしょう。

もし下記を、書き続けるなら、例、理由などさらに字数が必要です。

2016/10/28

英検2級英作文

高2による解答

1)     I agree. I think it is good to live with parents.

2)     Because it is safety.

3)     If young people live with their parents, they can look after their parents.

4)     I heard that it is serious to decrease the number of caregivers, and many nursing facilities don’t have vacancy.

5)     And so living with parents is needed to look after elderly people.

6)     Therefore, it is good for parents to live with their family.

7)     Moreover, it is also good for kids to live with their family.

8)     Because living cost which they must pay is cheaper.

9)     And they can divide housework, such as washing, cooking and cleaning their room.

10)  That’s why I think the number of young people who live with their parents will increase.

添削後)

1)     I think it is beneficial for young people to live with their parents.

2)     This is because all members can respectively have their benefits.

3)     When their parents face emergencies, for example, they can begin to assist their parents.

4)     I think that there are two serious problems; the number of caregivers in Japan is decreasing, and most nursing facilities can’t accept all elderly people that want to be taken care of there.

5)     Therefore, children can’t avoid living with their parents and looking after them.

6)     From the viewpoint of parents, though, it seems relaxing to live with their children,

7)     and vice versa.  

8)     There are several beneficial aspects, such as the possibility of low-cost life and dividing housework duties including washing, cooking and cleaning rooms among each other.

9)     8)とつないであります。

10)  In the future of Japan, therefore, the number of young people who live with their parents may increase.

評価)説明を加えず共通の情報がある場合は、簡潔に述べれば相手に理解してもらえるが、クリアに内容を伝えるのは具体的に書くことが必要です。

 たとえば、3)-5)は、例示として具体的に書けばいいのではと提案しました。

 

2016/10/26

大学入試問題 

以下の英文に関してオピニオンを書く。 問題文を要約しています。

According to this article, taking notes of university lectures by hand may be more advantageous to students than typing up them using laptops. In fact, this research found that the students that have better handwriting habits could grasp the lectures more clearly than other students who were hitting their keyboards. This is my opinion about this article says.

There are pros and cons to taking notes of university lectures. Some people say that writing by hand is better than by using laptops, and others disagree.

高3による解答

1)     I roughly agree with the idea of this article.

2)     As I like to write sentences and sometimes write long compositions, I prefer to use a pen and paper because I can work out the words better than using a computer.

3)     Moreover, I can remember complex Chinese characters or spelling of English words by practicing by hand.

4)     However, I think typing also has some advantages.

5)     For example, typing is so fast that you can take notes easily.

6)     Indeed, you can’t understand well while typing, but the notes is useful to keep the content of the lecture, meeting and so on.

7)     In addition, handwritten texts is somewhat difficult to read for people except the writer, so typed texts seem to suit materials of lecture, meeting and so on.

添削後

1) I feel there are beneficial and less beneficial aspects to this.

2) When it comes to me, I like to write both short and long compositions by hand, so handwriting is my favorite style of writing. That is because it can lead to coming up with better words than if I use my computer.

3) Moreover, I can remember kanji characters, which are complex Chinese characters, and English spelling when I practice them by hand.  

4) On the other hand, typing up words has several advantageous aspects.

5) For example, when you take notes typing up words, you can get a lot of information more quickly and easily.

6) You may not be able to understand the subjects well, though, while typing up them too fast, but it will be more useful when you want to keep as much information of lectures or meetings as possible in order not to miss out on them.

7) In addition, handwritten texts are somewhat difficult for others to read.

8) Therefore, typed texts seem to be more advantageous as materials for lectures, meetings and so on.

評価)

文法ミスはあまりないのですが、第1文と最後の文(結論)へ至る内容にちぐはぐ感がありました。

考えをクリアに伝えるために、どのように文と文をつなげるのかが重要です。

2016/10/25

英検2級

高2による解答

1) Yes, I think high schools should encourage more students to do volunteer work.

2)I have two reasons for this.

3)First, we can get good experience for doing volunteer.

4)In the future, we will work for not only making money, but also helping people.

5)Thus, I think doing volunteer is the best way to be used to work in the future.

6)Second, we can communicate a lot of people.

7)I think high school students don’t have any chances of communicating people.

8)Thus, doing volunteer has a big value for students.

9)For these reason, high school students should do volunteer.

添削後

1)I think all high school students should be encouraged to do volunteer work.

2)There are  two reasons for this.

3)First, we can get various kinds of beneficial experience through volunteering.

4)In the future, we will work not only to make money, but also to help others.

5)Thus, volunteering is the best way to prepare for our future occupations.

6)Second, we can meet and communicate with a lot of people.

7)High school students don’t have much chance to do so.

8)Thus, we should put a high value on volunteering.

9)For these reasons, high school students should volunteer.

評価)

この高1は、中1からオーラルメソッドにより4スキルを広く浅く学んできましたので、100字英作文にも比較的スムーズに対処できています。

英文による意味内容は理解できるものが多く、ロジカルです。

 

 

2014 BBA 塾長からのレター 

The goal to learn English uncertain here 曖昧な日本の英語教育の行方   H Okamoto

The nature of learning English is not only for success in exams but for acquiring skills to express various ideas from individual minds. Establishing relationships with foreign countries is the most important matter in the globalized world.

So the expressive aspects should be learnt in all schools in Japan. Millions of people around the world speak English. Besides, the business world these days needs its good practical abilities.

However, the teaching method in Japan is still old fashioned, that is, not containing  the concrete procedure to express personal opinions, so though adolescents begin to learn it, its good abilities can’t be acquired at all.

For example, teachers force them to learn grammatical rules and practice reading in classes, in which English can just be changed into Japanese. Also, there are no directions of good pronunciations, doing the shadowing, etc. Conversation classes are often replaced with the ones to solve grammatical problems. The goal to learn English is uncertain here.

Some people maintain that speaking ability is the most important. However, no efficient educational system to reach the goal has been practiced here. On the other hand, others say that the priority is to get good results of exams.

Truly, English is only a means for success in exams here. Whether or not expressive aspects can be learnt is out of the question before proceeding to universities. In other words, they insist, as if the English in Japan were different from the English of other countries, that communicative English can be studied after passing entrance exams. I doubt that we Japanese can be good English speakers for good, if we are subjected to this pedagogy.

英語学習の目的は、試験に合格し、さらに自分の考えを表現する技術獲得にもある。グローバル化の世界で重要なのは外国との関係です。

日本の学校は、英語表現の習得を目指す必要があります。世界の多くの人々が英語を話し、また、ビジネス界も実用英語能力を求めています。

日本の教授法は古く、自分の意見を述べる具体的な指導手順がなく、10代が英語を学び始めても、表現ができる能力の獲得は、まったくと言っていいほどありません。

先生は文法を教え、又リーデングもするのですが、和訳をするだけです。正しい発音指導、シャドーイングなどはしません。会話クラスは文法問題の授業に代わる場合がよくあります。英語学習の目標は不明確です。

会話能力が最重要だとの意見はあっても、その目標達成の効率的な教育システムはありません。最優先するべきは、試験結果であるとの強い意見が一方にあります。

事実、日本では英語は試験突破の手段にすぎません。表現力の習得はどうかなど、大学進学前には、問題にならないのです。日本の英語は外国の英語とはまるで違うかのようで、コムニカテイブな英語(英語を使うことができること)学習は、入学試験合格後にできることだとの主張があります。日本人がこうした教授法の元で学習し続けるなら、英語堪能な話者が生まれるとは到底信じられません。

BBA受講生は、この程度まで英文が書けますよ!

2014年版

0 大学生からの通信

 BBA塾長の上記英文に対する、現在高校2年生のオピニオンです

2 BBA塾長の上記英文に対する、現在中学3年生のオピニオンです

3 英語を学ぶ目的について書いた 現在高校2年生の英文です

Thanks to studying English at BBA   大阪大学基礎工学部 Naoki Nishida /2014

At my university, I’m using English more frequently than ever. As an undergraduate student in Biophysics, I have an opinion about English classes in Japan. I’ll illustrate with some cases from my own life, to describe the situation.

First, I often read papers to solve my questions. For example, how is “Wild Cat” in Boston Dynamics running? This robot’s running form mimics cats or cheetahs (called “galloping”), but what algorithm is it based on? I can solve this by reading papers at my university or online. Most of them are written in English, but fortunately, I do not find great difficulty in reading them. I think this is thanks to studying English at    BBA and in high school.

On the other hand, I’m not good at using English to communicate with other people. For example, I’m now joining a coding project that is processed online. Members of this project are from around the world, and they are speaking in their common language, which is, of course, English. To participate in discussion, I have to write in English, but I always have trouble doing this. For example, when I send an e-mail to the project leader, writing “I have to do ~~, don’t I?” is too rude or not? I think this problem is due to my lack of experience, but so important when we communicate in English. I feel the same difficulty in my speaking class.

In conclusion, I think we need a class teaching the basis of communicating in English. I do not mean students must be able to speak or write as native speakers. This is a potential future problem for each student. Studying during my high school days has helped me to solve my questions when I need to read English papers. Similarly, English class can make it easy for students to learn the ability to communicate in English.

○英語教育に関する私の意見 (塾長の英文コメントに対する意見です) Yuya Nishida

Many people criticize, saying that the English taught in the schools of Japan is impractical. That is, students cannot acquire some expressive aspects, both in speaking and writing. Others contend that young people should not learn this impractical English at all, and that the current teaching method should be replaced by another, more practical one. However, I think these opinions are wrong. Certainly, the current English learned in Japanese schools may not apply properly to everyone around the world. In spite of this fact, Japanese have to learn strict grammatical rules and the way to make and analyze sentences in order to be good speakers. Most high school teachers have been teaching students according to this pedagogy for many years. The judgment of whether or not these aspects have been learned may be an essential qualification for entrance examinations for universities in Japan. Of course, we won’t be able to become speakers of fluent English with this current teaching method. So I maintain here, on the other hand, that Japanese students should learn more about conversational English at school. Taking advantage of studying abroad or going to school journeys may be good opportunities, too. In spite of the time it takes to learn, most students can’t practice communicative skills during the school day. As a result, many office workers, who have graduated from university and have entered society, can’t avoid relearning English in order to be good speakers. So my opinion as to the Japanese teaching method of English is that, both grammatical and conversational aspects should be taught in all schools. An increase in the number of classes and foreign teachers for teaching of practical English is essential.

上記英文の要旨 東大寺高校2年

今日、日本の英語教育は、現実に即していないとして多くの人から非難を受けています。ですが、現在の”受験英語”を一概に批判する事は出来ません。学校で行われている英語教育もまた英語の一側面であり、決して不必要なものでは無いのです。今の教育現場に必要な事は、完全に方針を転換することではなく、現在は軽視されてしまっている英会話教育の割合を増やしていくことでは無いのでしょうか。

英語教育に関する私の意見 (塾長の英文コメントに対する意見です) Hana Mineshige

I’ve been studying English for three years and have learnt a lot of expressions in English. When I want to convey my idea to others, I have several expressions that I can use. However, I’m not taught which expression is better in my junior high school. For the same reason, I think that many Japanese learning English can express their ideas in English but not convey subtle points. I doubt whether the teaching method in Japan can create people who p1ay active roles globally in the future. We may be able to communicate among ourselves, but not with foreigners. Therefore, I think the Japanese should reconsider how to educate young people to make them the world’s leaders.

上記英文の要旨  洛南附中3

3年間、英語を勉強している。色々な英語表現を知った。考えを伝えたい時、いくつかの表現方法が思い浮かぶ。しかし、どの表現がよりふさわしいか中学校では習わない。同様に、自分が言いたいことを英語で伝えることができても、細かいところまでは表現できない学生は多いと思う。日本の教育方法では世界で活躍できる人材を生むことができるのか疑問だ。学校で習う英語で日本人同士なら理解できても、外国人とはできないだろう。将来のリーダーとなる若者を育成する仕方を、再考するべきだと思う。

○ Akari Samoto   私が英語を学ぶ理由

I am 17 years old now. This is the reason why I want to learn English. Recently, I began to read an English book, “I am Malala.” I also watched a TV program about her. I was very surprised to learn about her terrible situation. All children have the right to go to school, learn and have their own dreams. No one can interfere with their ambitions that they hold in their minds. There seem to be millions of people, who worry about their daily lives and face many difficulties all over the world, as well as in the country where Malala was born. I hope that I will acquire powerful abilities with which I can help people like them. Now that I think about it, I will join volunteer activities like digging wells or building schools in developing countries. My ambition for the future is to present people all over the world with smiles by working in these fields. I need to have good English ability in order to contribute to the future world.

上記英文の要旨 鳥羽高校2年

マララという女性を本とテレビで知った。彼女の置かれている過酷な状況に驚いた。子供は皆、学校へ行き、学び、夢を抱く権利を持っている。誰もそれらの邪魔はできない。世界中に苦しむ人々がいる。私は、将来、そうした人々に手をかす能力が欲しい。井戸を掘り学校を建てる力になりたい。私の夢は、人々に笑顔を届けることだ。未来世界に貢献するために、英語コミュニケーション能力を獲得したい。

2013年版

H Okamoto

You have passed the examination of the university which you’d like to attend the most. I have regard for this: you also succeeded in your presentation on the question about which you were told to explain in front of three professors in Osaka University as well as National center for University Entrance Examination. Your period which was difficult, uneasy but full of hope has passed and new future will be in sight. Congratulations.

By the way, I have something to ask you. This question is mainly about learning English. You learned English for 6 years, 4 skills in BBA; speaking, listening, writing and reading for four years and later did reading and compositions for entrance examinations of university of Japan.

When we learn English, I’m sure that the most important aspect is speaking and writing, abilities to convey your ideas clearly to others.

However, the English pedagogies in most schools in Japan are still old-fashioned, to say that they tend to spend most of the time teaching grammar and reading, Juken Ego. What do you think about this? If you agree with me, how should we reform the English education system? Or if not,

why do you think so?

Of course, I know that you spent time studying various subjects as well as English. However, would you mind expressing your views concerning my suggestion as an adolescent who experienced Juken Ego and holds the ambition to study abroad in the future?

大阪大学合格、おめでとう。センター試験だけでなく教授3人の前でプレゼンテーションを行い、見事に合格を果たした君を誇りに思います。困難ながら希望に満ちた時代が過ぎ、新しい未来が垣間見えていることでしょう。ところで、君は、6年間、BBAで英語を学んできました。最初の4年は4スキルを、後半は日本の大学入試のために、読む/書く技能上達のために勉強したわけです。僕は、英語学習で最も大切なのは、自分の考えを相手に伝えるための技能、話すと書くと考えています。しかし、日本のほとんどの学校の教育方法は古く、文法と読解、つまり受験英語です。この状況についてどう思いますか。僕の考えに同意するなら、どのように変わるべきですか。同意しないなら、なぜですか。君は、英語以外の勉強もしてきたのですが、受験英語を通過した10代として君の考えを聞かせて下さい。

 

受講生の返信レター

今春、現役で大阪大学推薦合格を勝ち取ったBBA受講生が、現在の日本の英語教育について交わした英文レター、第2弾です。

関西第一高卒 Naoki Nishida

Thank you so much. I believe that what I’ve learned in BBA in my 6 years will be all useful.

You asked me one question about the English education in Japan. As I have not finished all the English education in Japan yet, the education at university can change my opinion in the next 4 years but for now, I do agree with an idea that the English education system in Japan is old-fashioned. Writing and speaking skills are important but the Japanese education doesn’t give enough of them to students. I studied hard and could get good scores in English tests

However, I noticed a problem while I was on my trip to the U.K, which was the fact that I couldn’t convey my ideas to others well in English. I had difficulty even ordering some sandwiches there. I noticed the big gap between practical English and Juken Ego, English taught in Japanese schools.

Let’s consider one of the reasons why the system is like this before thinking about how to improve it. In fact, high school students in Japan have to take 6 credits on oral communication skills and 4 on writing as well as 4 on reading component.

(*1) However, the teachers in my school taught reading and grammar even in the former two classes for the preparation for entrance examinations.

The reason for this seems to be due to the specific entrance examination system. Various kinds of abilities are required in the examinations. Some universities focus on writing and listening skills while others require TOEIC score. However, most universities give us reading questions which contain difficult words and grammar rules. Under such situation, it is natural that teachers mainly teach grammar and reading.

How can we reform the English pedagogy in Japan? I have few ideas as to how this can be achieved. First, we have to come up with a new aim for English education. It has to focus on speaking and writing skills. Also, we have to reform the current entrance examination system which is old-fashioned. If my plans were achieved, the education system in Japan will gradually change better.

I’m also affected by this education system as well as other students. However, I think that I have two advantages. First, I know my weak points, writing and speaking skills. Second, I’ve already got my fundamental skills on these two points through BBA, a private English school. In next 4 years, I would like to make up for these weak points utilizing my advantages and finally get enough English skills to study abroad.

ありがとうございます。BBAでの6年間で学んだことは全てこれからも役立っていくと思います。

私はまだ日本の英語教育を全て終えていないため今後意見が変わるかもしれないが、それが古くさいものであるという意見に同意する。ライティングやスピーキングの力は重要だが、日本の教育ではそれを十分に鍛えてくれない。

私は勉強して英語のテストで良い点を取っていたが、イギリスへの旅行である問題を感じた。それは自分が英語で人にものを伝えることが出来ないということだった。そのときはサンドイッチを注文することすら難しかった。私は受験英語と実用英語の間の大きな隔たりを実感した。

教育体制をどう改善するか考える前に、なぜ今のような状況が生まれたのかを考察したい。実は日本の高校ではリーディングで4単位を取得しないといけないのと同様に、オーラルコミュニケーションで6単位、ライティングで4単位が割り当てられている。(*1)しかし私の学校のオーラルやライティングの授業では、入試対策としてリーディングや文法を教えていた。

その理由は独特な入学試験ではないかと思われる。大学入試では様々な種類の能力が要求される。ライティングやリスニングに焦点を当てた試験を課す大学があれば、TOEICのスコアを要求する大学もある。しかしほとんどの大学が難しい単語や文法規則を含んだ読解問題を出題している。このような状況では教師が主にリーディングや文法を教えるのは当然である。

では英語の教育法をどのように変えればよいだろうか。第一に英語教育の目標を新しく設定するべきである。それはライティングとスピーキングに焦点を当てたものであるべきだ。また今の入試体制も変えるべきである。これらが実現されれば日本の教育システムは徐々に良くなっていくだろう。

私もこの教育体制の影響を受けているが、私には二つの強みがあると思う。第一に私はライティングとスピーキングという自分の弱点を知っている。第二に、私は私塾のBBAでこの二つの力の基礎を身につけることが出来た。私はこれからの四年間でこの強みを生かしながら弱点を補い、最終的には海外で学べるぐらいの力を蓄えたいと思っている。

(*1)文部科学省公式サイトより

下記の英文は、BBAの塾長とBBAの高校生が、

現在の日本の英語教育の現状について交わした

英文レターと返信レターです。

塾長からのレター

In Japan, English is compulsory for children of the age from 10 to 18. Recently, more young children are starting to learn English in order to master conversation skills at earlier ages. Their parents are finding this essential for their children in the future.

However, their skills won’t develop for two reasons. First, the Japanese education system, especially the entrance exams of English can disturb adolescents developing their skills. Those are too specific; the aims are to check reading abilities, not the powers to express their ideas. Certainly without highly reading skill, the progress in English won’t be made.

However, can it be the most important aspect in this borderless world of globalization? Can it be the top priority in learning English? I maintain that this idea is not true because there are four aspects in English, speaking, writing, listening and reading. The former two ways are expressive but the latter two are receptive.

Nowadays, the most important ability is thought to be the expressive in order for one to convey their ideas to others. Even if little children start to learn English conversation earlier, they will definitely not have their skills developed smoothly by the interference of this system.

Also, most children are spending most of the time watching TV programs in Japanese not English at home. The gap between ideals and the reality of education is enormous.

Their parents are also too dependent on the systems; both the public and private education ones. To be precise, they tend to think that if they pay money and have their children attend school, they can achieve good skills without changing the parents’ life attitudes and their own consciousness.

Were learning a foreign language not associated with changing a way of thinking, making progress would be impossible.

英語は小中高で必修です。小さな頃から英会話を習い始める子供達もいます。しかし、スムーズに話せるようにはならないでしょう。日本の英語システム、特に入学試験が読解力重視で表現力を求めないので、10代が英語で自己表現するスキルを伸ばす機会がはばまれています。今、最も重要な英語能力は他者に自分の考えを伝える能力ですが、早期から英語学習を始めても入学試験勉強に阻まれ、スムーズに会話力を延ばすことができません。教育現場の理想と現実の差が大きいのです。日本の教育制度は、依然外国語が習得しにくい環境ですね。最後に、外国語を学ぶことで、自分のものの考え方が変わらないなら語学の進歩はありませんよね。さて、どう思いますか?

受講生からの返信

堀川高校探究科2年 Akari Mineshige

“The Japanese education system is too specific.” I agree with this opinion. When I went to America last year on my school trip, I had much trouble making myself understood in English. I was so shocked when I realized how little I can speak. I know many difficult words and I am good at reading, but when it comes to speaking, I can’t convey my idea to others well by using my knowledge.

Through my experience I know the characteristics of Japanese education system which focuses on reading skills as the most important aspect and rarely concerns about speaking skills. To improve this situation, what can we do? Is there any way that we students can do?

Before given an opportunity to think of this problem, I myself didn’t actually know about its actual conditions. By utilizing this chance, I will think over this problem and pursue what we, high school students can do.

First, we should realize the actual conditions of Japanese education system. While going on studying English in Japan, we tend to miss its merits and demerits and regard reading skills as the most significant unconsciously. That is because the shortest way to get high marks and pass the entrance examination is to develop reading skills. We always practice them so that we can read as fast as possible, cram many difficult words, and are rarely indifferent to expressive ways, such as pronunciations.

Second, we should become concerned about this modern world and so learn four elements impartially. While we study the English for entrance exams, we ourselves should compensate for what the Japanese education lacks: both speaking and writing skills. I think getting more chance to touch practical English is good, such as watching English movies and exchanging e-mails with foreigners.

These efforts may not be useful for us students preparing for entrance exams directly now in Japan. However, we hope we will be able to speak English fluently someday. How well we will live in globalization in the future depends on how wisely we can develop English skills now. Not only the English for entrance examinations will I be enthusiastic about mastering but also speaking and writing, to be precise, express skills of English!

日本の英語システムが狭いという意見に同意する。研修旅行でアメリカへ行ったが、相手に理解してもらうのに大変苦労した。ほとんど話せないことが分かってショックを受けた。私は多くの難しい単語を知っているし読解は得意だ。しかし話すとなると今の私では歯が立たない。私のアメリカでの経験はそのまま、日本の教育システムがリーディングスキルに焦点を当ててスピーキングスキルにあまり関心を抱いていないことを示しているのではないだろうか。そして、この状況を変えることはできないのか。問題提起されるまで、私自身この現実に気付かなかった。この機会に高校生としてできることを考えてみたい。第一に、私達は、現在の日本の教育システムを知るべきだ。日本で英語を学んでいるとリーディングスキルばかりを重んじる。入試で高得点を取るための近道だからだ。できるだけ早く読み、難しい単語を詰め込み、発音など表現スキルは軽視する。私たちは、受験勉強にとどまらずもっと広く現代世界に目を向けて英語の4スキルを学ぶべきだ。次に、受験勉強で欠ける要素、つまり話すこと、聞くことを自ら補わなければならない。日本の受験勉強には直接有効ではないかもしれないが、映画を英語で観たり外国人とメールのやり取りをしたりして実用的な英語に触れる機会を増やすことが大事だと思う。英語を話せるようになりたい。グローバリゼーションの世界をいかに生き抜くかは、いかに英語を上達させるかにかかっている。入試だけではなく英語での表現力習得に私は夢中なのだ。

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