高3の英作文

高3生の書いた150字程度の英作文と添削です。 2016/06/18

元文

  1. a) What is most important in order to achieve world peace is to learn those who are different from us in various points, such as nationality, religion, and gender.

 

  1. b) A collision often happens when people cannot understand each other.

 

  1. c) If we can comprehend others, wars in the world will surely decrease.

 

  1. d) Discrimination will also decrease if we can come to appreciate those who are really different from us.

 

  1. e) In the end, we will be able to achieve world peace.

 

  1. f) In order to learn those what seems odd to us, we have to try to have an interest in those.

 

  1. g) At the same time, we have to make efforts to make people know what we are, too.

 

  1. h) If we disclose our origin, we can probably make a compromise.

 

  1. i) j) Everyone in the world longs for world peace, so I don’t think it is unrealizable.

 

 

添削後の英文

World peace is important.

 

There seem to be several ways to promote peace.

 

  1. a) One of the most important things to do in order to achieve world peace is to learn about those who are different from us in various points, such as nationality, religion, and gender.

 

When misunderstanding each other in our daily lives, for example, if we have time to talk about trivial things, we may be able to resolve our current problems

 

  1. b)

1) Conflicts will often happen if people don’t understand others.

2) Lack of understanding is frequently a source of conflicts.

  1. c)

1) If we can comprehend others more, though, the number of wars that will break out in the world is sure to decrease.

2) If we can improve our mutual comprehension, there is no doubt that we will see the number of wars erupting on the planet fall.

 

  1. d) We may also be able to reduce discrimination with the same way of thinking.

 

  1. f) In order to learn about those who seem strange to us, it is essential for us to have curiosity about different people, both men and women, and both poor and rich people.
  2. g)

1) Also, it is important to have others know what we are like.

2) We should also try to let others understand our own characters.

 

1) That is to say, it is necessary for us to convey what we are to others through positive interactions.

2) By this, I mean that we must communicate our own true natures through constructive interactions.

 

  1. h)

1) This is because if we can realize that we have evolved from the same origin, we can understand others more.

2) If we can see that we all share the same roots, we can better understand one another.

 

  1. i)

1) All people around the world long for world peace.

2) There is a great yearning for world peace among people all over the world.

 

j)

1) In the end, we will surely be able to achieve world peace.

2) Ultimately, world peace is an achievable goal.

 

 

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